It starts as a low noise, like a blowing breeze, but with interspersed split-second moments of silence. High pitched noises creep up from nowhere and grow louder and louder only to hit a certain point and fall down to the steady noise. More squeaks and squeals pass as the noise grows louder in waves, as if wind is battering a recording microphone. Suddenly a great noise approaches and then falls, following the pattern of the squeals. The noise and the squeals are then accompanied by a series of barely audible clicks, slightly louder than the noise, and with a few more squeals, the track is at an end, and deafening silence permeates my consciousness.
The part of your description that captured me the most was "more squeaks and squeals pass as the noise grows louder in waves, as if wind is battering a recording microphone." This stood out to me the most because I could hear wind going against a microphone and it made a lot of sense to me.
ReplyDeleteThe way that you described your sound made a really clear sound to me.. i could really understand what you were saying.
To make this a little better, I would have put some more similes and metaphors, but other than that it was really good!(: